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Tempted Heart
I can sense your love from the deep recesses of you
As your eyes tell me that this is the place where you need to be
To experience Joy.
How do you stand there before me,
Tall, Proud
And self assured
Knowing that a simple whisper from you
Makes my knees go weak
My breath shallow
And my heart beating heavily from your nearness.
What is this hold you have over me?
What is this strong sublime effect that you use to
Caress my emotions?
Your eyes dance with light, so luminous,
Your smile sways with genuine kindness
And your voice raises me to an altered awareness that
Assures me that I can entrust you with my heart.
So, for you
I can honestly say
You have almost captivated me
And I Am
Tempted to fall so deeply,
Into an endless pool of love
With you
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March 25th, 2007, 07:46 PM
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Nice expressions of lust err I mean love. lol
I have been here before...
Isnt it nice to feel like that about somebody.
Good work.
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March 26th, 2007, 12:59 PM
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I agree, a good piece of work. When I was reading, the music to the song 'underwater lover' came to mind. So calm and smooth.
poeticasylum1, looks like you may have competition on your hands, but it is all good, and you are good for each other, poetically that is.
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March 26th, 2007, 04:22 PM
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Originally Posted by poeticasylum1
Nice expressions of lust err I mean love. lol
I have been here before...
Isnt it nice to feel like that about somebody.
Good work.
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I humbly thank you. I agree, it certainly is a nice feeling. |
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March 26th, 2007, 04:31 PM
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nice.  i love this poem I can see myself saying this to my friend |
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March 27th, 2007, 06:24 PM
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 Your feedback is very much appreciated.
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March 30th, 2007, 01:37 AM
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I love the delicacy of this one.
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March 30th, 2007, 02:26 AM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by BlackOpal63
I can sense your love from the deep recesses of you
As your eyes tell me that this is the place where you need to be
To experience Joy.
How do you stand there before me,
Tall, Proud
And self assured
Knowing that a simple whisper from you
Makes my knees go weak
My breath shallow
And my heart beating heavily from your nearness.
What is this hold you have over me?
What is this strong sublime effect that you use to
Caress my emotions?
Your eyes dance with light, so luminous,
Your smile sways with genuine kindness
And your voice raises me to an altered awareness that
Assures me that I can entrust you with my heart.
So, for you
I can honestly say
You have almost captivated me
And I Am
Tempted to fall so deeply,
Into an endless pool of love
With you
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So lovely, so sweet it reminds me of what love use to be in the heat of passion and youth. Ah, bravo, bravo |
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March 31st, 2007, 09:53 AM
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Awww thank you |
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March 31st, 2007, 09:58 AM
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I love the delicacy of this one.
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 Glad you liked it.
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